PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Under the Bridge
It was just a stretch of highway that crossed over a creek.
Nothing special to look at, not worth travelling to seek.
We lived under the bridge, it gave us shelter from the rain
We had nothing much to live for, just more misery and pain.
How many more people have fallen through the cracks?
Shelter under bridges, on the wrong side of the tracks?
Each day an ordeal through which we must be brave.
Do not seek us under bridges, all you’ll find now, is our grave.
[90 word]
Copyright: Kristian Fogarty 16/November/2018
I started out writing a story, but It kept falling into a pattern and it became a poem. I am sorry if this does not comply with the rules, but creativity sometimes has a life of its own.
This was written for Friday Fictioneers Challenge, see the link:
WOW that was powerful and beautifully written.
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Thank you very much. I did actually have a bit of a tear in my eye when I wrote the last line. Soppy fool that I am 🙂
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What’s wrong with soppy? Besides it was perfection.
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🙂
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What rules do you speak of? Only ones to try to obey are keeping the word count to 100 or less and giving credit to the owner of the photo – so you’re good!
As for this. Wow. This was truly well done.
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Bless you, thank you. I wasn;t sure a poem was allowed. I actually write much more prose than poetry but this just, sort of, happened. 🙂
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Oh, absolutely allowed! Happens quite often, actually 😉
And I love it best when it sorta just happens…
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I’m not much of a planner when it comes to writing. I think things are often better when there is an element of spontaneity. With photos too, the planned ones look staged the ones that just happen are better. 🙂
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Agree with you one hundred percent! As with photography too… I’m a shoot and write from the hip kinda gal…
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🙂
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Excellent, the style suits it very well.
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Thank you, Iain. 🙂
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You’re right. We did see the same story, but yours rhymes
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Great minds think alike. 🙂 The rhyme sort of happened by itself.
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This is wonderful, Kristian. I like how you weaved a profound message through such whimsical lines. And that’s the beauty of creativity—sometimes, it takes you somewhere completely unexpected!
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Thank you very much Jade. That’s true. Creativity can take us on a journey, like life. 🙂
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Sad that it is true
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Indeed it is.
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Beautifully done, and so sadly true to life.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you, Yes sad but true. 🙂
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Beautiful. and I was a bit a rule breaker this week too!
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Ooh I shall have a look. 🙂
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great take on the prompt. well done.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Tightly written, great take on the prompt, well done
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Thank you very much. I’m enjoying writing under strict word limits because it curtails my natural tendency to waffle. 🙂
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Yes, all mine start out at about 150 words and sometimes you have to edit quite brutally but it teaches you a lot and shows just how superfluous some of your writing really is
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That is true. Like using a machete in the jungle to clear away the path. 🙂
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Nice metaphor
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Thank you. I will have to use it in a story sometime 😉
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Your piece works well as a poem, could almost be lyrics.
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Yes, I didn’t think of that! It’s a bit like that song ‘Let me take you by the hand and lead you through the streets of London’. Thank you 🙂
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Dear Kristian,
You’ve said a lot in few words. BTW I’m familiar with the song you mentioned to Jilly. And it does resonate like the song. Beautifully written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you. Rochelle, I really appreciate that. I do enjoy the challenges you host. 🙂
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So, so beautiful!
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Thank you, That’s lovely.
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