PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson
I always had a fear of water and of drowning.
Life has changed that.
I gazed at that crystal blue mountain stream and listened to the melody as the water gushed over the rocks to collect in the shallow pool below.
The sound soothed that inner torment. I felt a sense of peace.
Life had overwhelmed me; made me realise that fear of drowning, fear of death was nothing compared to my fear of living.
I plunged head first into the freezing water.
Was it possible to drown in shallow water?
It is when you refuse to struggle any more.
[100 Words]
Copyright: Kristian Fogarty 23/November/2018
This was written for Friday Fictioneers Challenge, see the link:
I have also included two word prompts:
https://onedailyprompt.wordpress.com/2018/11/23/your-daily-word-prompt-overwhelm-november-23-2018/
This is really good. Deep. And using both the prompts as well!
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They all helped to bring the scene into my mind. The melody of the bubbling stream, the overwhelming nature of life…..and then the end result. 🙂
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Did great!
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Wonderful message! In shallow waters I found a deep meaning. 😀
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Yes, that is so. Thank you. 🙂
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Well done, Kristian. I’m not usually a fan of the multi-prompt because it can get choppy. This was smooth like buttah 😉
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Haha, Thank you. I know they can start to look like the word is just inserted but doesn’t fit with the rest of the story. I’m glad you liked it, and felt it blending in together OK. 🙂
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Definitely!
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Drowning as deliverence. I liked this
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Thank you. It wouldn’t be the way I’d choose to go, but I can empathise with the idea. 🙂
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Neat handling of the multiple prompt. Well done.
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Haha, Thank you 🙂 I did go down the death route this time though. I need to lighten up a bit. 🙂
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Powerfully written and so very sad.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you. Yes, It is sad. 🙂
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Man, not sure about the drowning bit, but your story is well written. Nicely done.
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Thank you. It’s not a nice subject I grant you. 🙂
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Dear Kristian,
A lot said in the line, “fear of death is nothing compared to fear of living”. Well done. I’m with Dale. I’m not a fan of multiprompts but this was seamless.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much Rochelle. Much Appreciated 🙂
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That gave me a lot to think about. Thank you.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. 🙂
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A sad piece but expertly delivered, well done
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Thank you very much. 🙂
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Whatever made him choose death must have been immensely, overwhelmingly terrifying. Sad story, well told.
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Yes, I have empathy with what he felt, but I am so pleased to say that I haven’t felt that way myself. Thanks for reading 🙂
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