50 Word Thursday’s #2 – The Book of Lost Souls.


I spin in a haze of greens, blues, and white, my perceptions unravelling like a roll of gauze.
Splintered by A. G. Howard

This story was written for the 50 word Thursday Challenge, this week hosted by Teresa, The Haunted Wordsmith, Click below to find out more:

The Book of Lost Souls

I’d been warned about going into Uncle Peregrine’s attic. Since his death, it’d been kept untouched. Elsie refused to dust it. That added to the mystery and I just couldn’t resist.

Uncle Peregrine had been distinctly odd. He’d wander around wearing red flowing robes and a pink silk turban on his head, smoking extremely unpleasant smelling cigars. He’d been a practitioner of the occult, but I’d always found him an immensely funny silly old fool.

The house was its usual bustle on a Sunday morning as everyone, even the staff, prepared to go to Church. I managed to feign illness; a bit of judicious rubbing behind the ears was enough to convince Mother that I had a rash and couldn’t possibly go along.

When they’d gone, I crept into the dusty old attic room, the walls lined with books.

One book appeared to be a children’s colouring book.

Gingerly I open it and I spin in a haze of greens, blues, and white, my perceptions unravelling like a roll of gauze.

My mind impossibly lost without a road map to help me back to reality.

Around me, I am surrounded by a riot of colour and shapes.

Then I spy a large figure sitting on the back of a tangerine coloured camel, wearing red robes and a pink turban.

Uncle Peregrine beams at me.

“There you are, my boy. Come to keep your Uncle company, have you? I hope you’ve said your goodbyes, there’s no going back now, you know.”

I have also included The Three Things challenge: Books, Lost, Road Map.

If you enjoyed this challenge, why not click on the link and have a go?

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7 thoughts on “50 Word Thursday’s #2 – The Book of Lost Souls.”

  1. First off, that psychedelic image is delightful. Takes me back fifty-odd years.
    Second, back in the days when cliches were allowed, we’d say “Curiosity killed the cat.” Now I guess I should come up with something new and unique. Um… “Curious clinches catastrophe” or “Wonder invites woe”?
    Third, was your shift of verb tense as the MC opened the book—going from past to present— deliberately done for effect? It’s rather intriguing.

    I’m taking a quick breather from the book editing that’s occupied me this past month. I’ve been off in my own little world too long, but the end is in sight.

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    1. Hi Christime. Glad you are taking a break from your editing, Happy New Year to you. 🙂 Hope it’s all going well. Teresa chose that really eclectic picture, you can ask her where she go it. It is really colorful isn’t it.
      I don’t mind cliches I know you are supposed to ‘Kill the Cliches and ditch the Adverbs’ but I just say write what comes naturally and a good cliche is always undersood.
      You spotted that change of tense, it was deliberate, going from the reflective to the current action, but it was also done to fit the words that I had to include as part of the challenge, it wasn’t too bad, was it?

      All the best. 🙂

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    2. The verb switch works okay, or you could do the whole thing in present tense, for the word-count sake. You could start out with “They’d warned me about U P’s attic” instead of the passive,”I’d been warned…” And you could cut out “on his head” because where else would you wear a turban.

      As to my editing going well… I was done, but realized that now I have to “up” the reading level. It’s good for 10-12 yr-olds now and he wants it to appeal to adults as well as teens. I started on the redo yesterday.

      Question: circa 1975, what would you folks have called a fancy dresser or someone dressed in finery? We’d have said “a dandy” but I don’t want to use an expression Brits nowadays would assume meant gay.

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